Essay : The natural ability or Work Hard ?
Which is more important for success : the natural ability you are born with or hard work? Explain your opinion , using specific reasons and examples.
To success in life is depend on many factors such as luck, money, talent, hardworking and to name but a few. Some people argue about the most important factors effecting to peoples success. To consider in factors of natural ability received when birthed and hard working is difficult for me to choose. Nevertheless when it comes to the situation that I have to show my preference, I would say that I believe that hard working will lead people to real success in their life. Although I have indicated my choice, I am glad to offer the detailed comparison between talent and hard working.
In term of studying , people who born to be good at Mathematic will have a better and faster understanding in lessons than individuals who does not have talent in reckoning. But that can make them underestimate the situation and pay less attention in reading books. As a result, they may get low grade in examination and may not succeed in what they expected. However, people who realize themselves that do not good at calculating, they will have a bit pressure on themselves and will have more attempt to work hard on exam preparation and tutoring. Consequently, they will get more score than what they expected.
In term of playing sport ,some might good at playing sport but some might not. Person who has good natural ability in playing football will have a good skill in various techniques. But he may ignore practicing with the team. One man show has never work in football game therefore he will not be able to get along well with the team. However the players with low potentials in football but have inspiration, they have ambitious to be in a football team. They will work hard in what they expected and receive what they want. To supporting idea of practicing , there is one classic example. Many people say that Tiger Wood has a good talent in golf. But the very important thing that people should realize is he has practiced playing golf everyday since he was 6 years old. Without paying attention in practicing, will he gain the expertise and receive the acceptance all around the world?
I would say that talent is one of the factor to bring people to success in their life but the factor playing a vital role for the success is hard working. For one who want to get a good score in TOEFL, who can deny the importance of hard practicing?
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จากคุณ : Handsome
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ง่วงแล้ว ดูผ่านๆก่อนนะคะ เดี๋ยวมาใหม่
ส่วนใหญ่เป็นเรื่อง v.แท้ v.ช่วย และ adj ค่ะ ที่มีข้อผิดพลาด
เช่น
depend on เป็น v แล้วค่ะ ไม่ต้องใช้ v.to be
people who born.... ควรเป็น who were born
ambitious เป็น adj ค่ะตามหลัง have ที่เป็น v. แท้ไม่ได้
who want ควรเป็น wants ค่ะ
จากคุณ : Never gone
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Error from the start:
"To success in life is depend on many factors such..."--- there is no subject in the sentence!!
To be successful in life, IT depends on many factors such...
"Some people argue..."---some people may not!!
Some people MAY argue....
"ability received when birthed "---???? maybe a diction problem.
INNATE ability (or TALENT)
"is difficult for me to choose."--- You cannot hesitate!!
In this test, YOU MUST CHOOSE!!
"people who born to be good at Mathematic"
people who WERE born with a talent in MATHEMATICS.
"will have a better and faster understanding in lessons than individuals who does not have talent in reckoning."
will have a better and faster approach (or method or means) to solve the given problems than those who do not possess this specific skill.
"One man show has never work in football game"--tense and article
A ONE-MAN show has never WORKED in A football game.
These are some examples of grammatical errors krub... There are more of them in the essay though.
Anyway, you should start with your answer first... Then you give reasons to support your proposition. But you wrote it in an opposite way....
Well... lots of grammatical errors--- maybe more than previous topics. Need lots of improvements again krub.... Sorry about that....
In a paragraph which talks about sport, arrangement was quite disarrayed. So I didn't see good reasonings to support your thoughts.
Try again na krub...
จากคุณ : amatuer translator
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Tips;
1. An essay consists of complete sentences!! So, in a sentence, it needs a subject and a verb. If you can start from this simple tip, you can increase your score a bit, I guess.
2. A subject can be either plural or singular noun, so verb/tense should correspond with the subject accordingly.
3. To describe literal meanings of abstract/non-abstract "things", you really need extensive knowledge of vocaburaries.... The more the better. If you do, you can describe something so complicated within a single word!!
4. Reading is a key to success of writing good stories.... Reading, reading and reading.... This may take years of efforts... But it will pay off to you eventually. Practicing by just writing will help you in a short run.... But, in a long run, you will really need it somehow.... Reading from good sources/magazines can unwittingly help you.
5. Always writing something to someone all the times.... Ability in telling a good story cannot develop in a single day... It alway starts from your personal passion to communicate by writing... Start giving your comments in English in any place (Pantip maybe), writing your e-mails in English telling your daily stories to people you know, and writing a diary (if you like it).....
Practicing from ETS questions may help you to pass its test but it will not help you to succeed in your higher education (if any).
6. There is no such good lucks helping you to succeed.... You and yourself determine your successfulness...
Lastly, to be polite, good luck krub.... :)
จากคุณ : amatuer translator
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Dear everyone,
especially Khun amatuer translator,
You gave me such a long note. I really appreciate your recommendation.
Though the outcome of my essay is not good as i expected. But it is really worth for me to know such good guys in this webboard, share me good knowlegde.
I wish I could do it better. In short term, I might need to practice more for getting good scores for Toefl... For long term, as your recommend, I need more reading....
BIG THANKS "_"
จากคุณ : the phu (The phu)
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Firstly, I would like to share my experience to you... I've seen your efforts put into these essays. Assumingly, you would like to be a better person particularly in your writing skills.
Well, although it took lots of time and efforts to come up with this kind of "more or less" fluency. Encouragement or a little pat on your shoulders may help you a bit--- not to be worried much about what you made mistakes.
But, the essence is how to improve yourself from these mistakes. Please find good sources of writings, then read them na krub...
We live in a country where our native language has long solely been prevailing... So, it's understandable (for me not to your ETS examiners) that our proficiency in foreign languages is quite "timid" in general. But, unfortunately, if you need more accountable, latest, and up-to-date knowledge, this kind of knowledge is always written in English..... As a result, acquiring English proficiency will be a plus plus side for you at the end of the day. It can make you to be an independent and life-long learner.... Isn't that what we're seeking for?
Chin up and grab something to read krub....
And, finally, to be polite, good luck krub.... :)
จากคุณ : amatuer translator
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ขอโทษนะครับ อย่างที่คุณ the plu เขียนมานี่ จะได้คะแนนประมาณเท่าไรเหรอครับ อยากให้คุณ amatuer translatorและทุกคน ช่วยประเมินหน่อยครับ ขอบคุณครับ
จากคุณ : JaY-KaY
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I don't know how ETS gives their scores....
If I would rate this essay from F to A scale, it would be rated around D+ to C krub.... (maybe I am too rough, so don't take it seriously.)
จากคุณ : amatuer translator
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Hi Khun Jay-Kay, thks for coming to read my essay... I think you are on the way to Toefl test as well, don't you? good luck anyway.
Hi Khun amatuer translator,
Thank you again ka.
You are absolutely right. I would like to improve my skill in English, especially in English.
Actually everyday at my workplace, I use English - for reading and writing. Most of the time it is email communication. I use English and do not notice much about grammar,just from instinct.....
Then..when it comes to do it correctly in grammar.That is difficult one....
I will take you notes and will notice more about daily life about English. That's not easy for me becuase I am not that kind of person. But will try.
Lastly , U r nice ( though my grade is low = D,C+) ... thanks again.
P.S. Will you believe me? With your advice, today I bought a English book....Sooner is better... right.
จากคุณ : the phu (The phu)
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If I did hurt your feelings, please accept my sincere apology na krub... No ill will... just an old habit of being a prof....grading students and giving them a tough time to recollect upon themselves... :)
The given D+ to C was based on my own subjective scale.... assuming that you're in a graduate school in the US.
I'm glad, you bought AN English book upon my advice.... (a, an, the--- one of the most errors found among Thai students.)
If you could put up with my "pushy" behaviors, I would suggest you to read;
1. Times
2. National Geographic, and,
3. Scientific American.
These might be some good writing sources with reasonable prices.
Lastly, thanks for your compliment... I'm not nice... I'm a meany!! :)
As a decent tradition, to be polite, good luck krub... :)
จากคุณ : amatuer translator
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